“Not Sure” (Friday Fiction Word Count: 97)
Really?
This is it?
Honey, I’m not sure….
not
sure
I can live here.
Not sure we have a choice right now.
But you said Los Gatos??
I thought it’d be way different – maybe a Doogie Howser kinda pad.
I only saw the place from the front. Think of how much money we could save –
living here while we decide what to do next. Don’t forget that we were sure this state was where
we needed to be right now.
(exhales)
… um
maybe it could work….
(looks at building)
… at least it has a fireplace.
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…at least they’ll stay warm! Excellent.
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🙂 thanks
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Dear Yvette,
It’s always good to look on the bright side, isn’t it? Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Lovely piece of fiction writing! 🙂
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gracias Miss G
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So much depth, so many layers within only a few words… I particularly like the concise, poignant style.
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muchas gracias amiga! that was so nice to read
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Your piece reminded me of a couple of cases I witnessed over the years… a good reminder to appreciate what we have.
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yes- that was not my intention – but you are right – does stir up gratefulness – for like windows and a clear pathway without a double fence – lol
and seriously – for shelter in general perhaps
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Yes, my mind went directly to shelter in general.
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🙂
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Nice! The fireplace saved it for now. Eager to know what happens next. There’s so much depth here.
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really appreciate your comment author Mahesh!
and I almost tied this flash fiction into another Marcel story – but as I pondered the photo for a fourth and fifth time – that fireplace kept calling to me – it just had so much interest – and so that was how the snapshot came…
but maybe we can pretend they hustle and pimp this baby out – white furniture – gray/blue hardwood floors – all new remote control windows- with sleek shades and cream sheers – 😉 oh and they were going to get a gas upgraded double-side fireplace out in = but kept the original fireplace just for fun
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It pays to be optimistic but I’m afraid reality will win out after a week or so. 😉
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ahh – so you are the realist.
and you could be right – I give them a month and they either remodel or find a better place
(thanks for the comment)
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Oh, goodness. I wonder how much other stuff he’s talked her into.
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hah – chuckled with that – but I am thinking they are team and he has had to compromise at times too – or maybe he will – 🙂
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There’s always a positive… sometimes you just need to look a little harder for it. Nicely done.
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thanks – and sometimes survival mode can extract flexibility that ends up being good for human demandingness
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Oh I think they will be all right… sometimes you have to start from the bottom and work your way up (again)
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thanks – again and maybe again (thanks for that word) ‘
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