Hello Readers, The Carrot Ranch writing prompt this week is to create a flash fiction piece of 99 words (no more, no less) that answers the question, “Who is Monreal Dorb?”
Here is the Priorhouse submission:
Title: Who is Monreal Dorb?
Word Count: 99
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Will you read aloud?
Sure.
“Something in his walk, his look – the way he stopped when he saw us.”
Three more people listened in.
Louis L’Amour words filled the air like cognitive candy: land, skies, suspense, character quirks…
”Orrin was cocky, with a tone of authority. Beneath it, he was still the same man – only better – from livin’, learnin’, and all that growin'”
Reaching the last page, we sat up attentively.
“Mountain air is clear. Sound carries. When Dru called out – we knew who was Monreal Dorb. It was Tom Sunday!”
We sat silent.
Moved from our western escape.
This fiction idea was based on recent events. During our recent quick trip to see baby James, I read aloud from a Louis L’Amour book, and from “The Gradual” by Christopher Priest. It was fun and is not something we get to do very often.
In my short fiction piece I was trying to highlight the power of a good story – and the escape and refreshment it can offer. 🙂
also, the text is mostly Louis L’Amour’s words (from The Daybreakers) but modified to fit my fiction.
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What fun! Did not see Louis L’Amour coming from tis prompt, but there it is.
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Thanks 😊
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What a wonderfully creative idea and how could I resist Louis L’Amour!
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Hi Charli! When I wrote this I really did not even think of the whole ranch connection with your themes and all – and how could I not??? duh – perfect fit.
and only a few years ago did I finally read L’Amour, after first hearing about him from my Botany professor back in 1993 or 1994
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He is one of my favorite writers 🙂
thanks for the comment and for hosting the fiction challenge
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Well wrought, Yvette.
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thank you Tish
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What a clever response, Yvette. I enjoyed it. A great way to promote reading aloud. 🙂
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Hi Norah, I want to do more reading aloud and I am always amazed at how poverty especially comes to life with certain orators.
Like I read a poem by a guy who was a rebel – and wrote about being a bully – but when I heard him read on a radio show – the experience was felt –
have a good day
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In their own voices …
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Very nicely done, Yvette. The top image drew me in, but I’m glad I stayed.
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I am glad you did too – thanks Dan
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That is very good that you can come up with exactly 99 words for the story!!!
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Thanks YC, it takes a little practice but it is also a good exercise – to try and write flash fiction. I suggest that all writers experiment with short fiction at some point because it can help you learn how to trim the fat (so to speak)
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This is a lovely piece, Yvette. I enjoyed reading it.
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so glad to hear that, Robbie 🙂 thanks for the visit
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I like the B&W photos you chose Yvette, especially the old and torn cover of the Louis L’Amour book. I have never read anything by L’Amour.
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